I didn’t finish reading Vincent Vale’s Mobius. It’s about a man named Theron Mobius. He’s brilliant, he’s possibly insane, and his work on space travel has made him very useful. Unfortunately, after reading about a third of the book I had to put it down. It has a couple of main problems (I won’t worry about the small ones here). One is that all of the dialogue is horribly stilted. Not a single conversation feels at all natural; the characters all sound like they’re reading lines from a script and often overacting as well.
The other problem is a variation on the same: everything seems stilted. Character choices feel like they’re made for the purpose of furthering a plot rather than feeling organic. I can’t get into any of the characters when they all feel like cardboard cutouts practicing for a drama class.